It was a chilly day Jimmy the human and Karli the dog are on a beach sitting on a smooth rock in the sunset. Looking at an island far off into the distance. The island had a lighthouse on it with seagulls flying above it. Waves were splashing the rocks on the shore. Jimmy was a little boy with curly blond hair? He was also wearing a blue shirt with a picture of a sun. Karli the dog was a female border collie with the softest pink fur that swished around in the wind.
I like how you used describing words in your story to describe the dog and scenery around them. Next time you could work on puncuation xD
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ReplyDeleteI liked how you described what you could see on the beach. Next time you should describe what you can hear, smell and taste. I agree with Jamie that next time you can work on your punctuation.